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--- resources:fic:playtime_is_over [2016/02/09 00:51]
thomasl created
+++ resources:fic:playtime_is_over [2016/02/22 09:18] (current)
thomasl
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 “Shut up…”
-“Mother said that we mustn’t take the knives, Armand!”
+“Mother said that we mustn’t have the knives, Armand!”
 “I don’t care, she’s not //my// mother, she’s just yours, I don’t care what she says.  I’ll put this knife back when I’m done anyway and nobody will know.”
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 “Not a word, Penelope, or I’ll…”
-He made a mock motion forward, but that was all it took: Penelope shrieked and ran away from Armand toward the nearby tree and started climbing it, shrieking.  Armand realised he was going to be in trouble, and quickly lowered the knife.
+He made a mock motion forward, but that was all it took: Penelope shrieked and ran away from Armand toward the nearby tree and started climbing it, still shrieking.  Armand realised he was going to be in trouble, and quickly lowered the knife.
 “Penelope!” the boy said, trying to calm her down, but she continued climbing, panicked.
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-“Bloody hell, did you hear about that Cargan girl?”
+“Did you hear about that Cargan girl?”
 “Of course I did!  The whole city’s talking about it!”
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-{{tag>"playtime is over" fic}}
+{{tag>"playtime is over" thomasl fic}}